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LordWolv
12-10-2010, 10:53 AM
He shoved the man over, pushing everyone in his path, desperately glancing around. Tim was paranoid. For 10 years he had been hunted by a ruthless assassin. All he wanted was power.. and what if it was gained at the loss of a few lives? He thought he had the clear road to leadership, when suddenly the assassin hit Rome, the world known killer. All Spain's leaders had been recently found with daggers stuck in their foreheads, they were murdered and the thrown was clear, clear for Tim.. He knew the assassin was close. He was sure he had seen the flying white cloak, the unmistakable hood and the perfectly crafted weapons. He stopped, turned around, then stared up at Ezio Auditore Da Firenze, crouched on the rooftop, smiling down at him. It was already too late.

You probably didn't read all that, but thank you if you did. Tell me what you think. http://forums.ubi.com/images/smilies/88.gif

ViNyLek
12-10-2010, 10:57 AM
There is something to it, but way too short and the fact that Tim could spot "perfectly crafter weapons" and white cloak few stories higher sounds incredible and makes him sound like he could easily take on Ezio;-) Oh, and thrown needs fixing LOL You have the end now on to the rest^^

persiateddy95
12-10-2010, 11:06 AM
It's not that long.

8/10

SleezeRocker
12-10-2010, 11:10 AM
Originally posted by persiateddy95:
It's not that long.

Hence "Short" story? lol http://forums.ubi.com/groupee_common/emoticons/icon_smile.gif
Was ok, but...wasn't really exciting. It felt like playing Trajan Market addon but described in words lol

LordWolv
12-10-2010, 11:14 AM
Where is the Trajan Market, I've been meaning to ask it for awhile, I've got the special edition but I can't find it..

persiateddy95
12-10-2010, 11:15 AM
Well that fact is that he contradicted himself, since he said:

Originally posted by Isaac500:
You probably didn't read all that, but thank you if you did. http://forums.ubi.com/images/smilies/88.gif
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SleezeRocker
12-10-2010, 11:16 AM
Originally posted by Isaac500:
Where is the Trajan Market, I've been meaning to ask it for awhile, I've got the special edition but I can't find it..

On your map look for a '+' (Templar Cross) icon on the map. they are noted as "Templar Lair" on the map http://forums.ubi.com/groupee_common/emoticons/icon_wink.gif