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PBNA-Boosher
08-03-2004, 06:27 PM
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Boosher
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"So do all who live to see such times, but that is not for them to decide. All you have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to you..."
-Gandalf

PBNA-Boosher
08-03-2004, 06:27 PM
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Boosher
_____________________________
"So do all who live to see such times, but that is not for them to decide. All you have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to you..."
-Gandalf

PBNA-Boosher
08-03-2004, 06:28 PM
Can you guys tell me whether you can detect Russian culture in these sample briefings? In my 150-200 mission campaign, these will basically be what briefings will be like. I need to know if the feeling is close to what a dedicated Russian patriot would feel in the 1940's for her country. Thanks for reading these guys! Please give me feedback!


Sample Briefing #1: May the 24th, 1942- Small farm, 27 kilometers north of Novorossijsk..

I opened the flap to the briefing tent. Many of the girls are already there, sitting on the ground for lack of food crates to use as chairs. Major Bershanskaya was there at the head of the tent, as usual. She was a good leader, if not sometimes very strict. The large tent was dusty, but overall very clean. It had a feeling of comfort that came with the multitude of people that gathered there every night. I ran my fingers through my hair, it felt thick and greasy. We all had not bathed in several days. Major Bershanskaya cleared her throat. Many of our girls, who had been gossiping and giggling wildly, immediately fell silent.
"Good, good my darlings, you are all here.‚"Ě the Major said. I looked around at the women. I noted many of my friends had new uniforms. I was still in my bulky male uniform. I was never good at stitching. Several of the girls also shared my lack of talent, but that didn‚'t stop them from making their clothes fit. I turned behind me and saw an empty spot on the floor. My stomach growled, not because I was hungry, but with the sadness that I remembered from the night before. It always did that, I have never known why. The girls near me shifted slightly farther away after that. I looked over at Irina. She seemed not to be faring too well after her ordeal the night before.
While the Major was calling the pairs of pilot and navigator for the night, images flashed through my mind. A Po-2 fluttered in the distance, slowly drawing in. I had already completed my flight, and my navigator that night, Alexandra Akimova, who I do not normally fly with, was reporting the mission status. As the slow biplane floated into the light, I heard the engine sputtering, coughing. With a last, trying attempt, the engine brought the propeller around one last time, before it died and the plane fell three meters onto the soft ground. I saw Irina white with shock, and the body she held back to keep it from falling on the flight stick. Irina‚'s face was covered in the pilot‚'s blood. I looked at the face of the dead pilot, and immediately turned away. It was Dusya Nosal, with a bullet straight through her temple. Her eyes were wide, and her mouth hung open in shock...
I was brought back to the present, and doubled over to prevent anyone from seeing my crying. I had grown up as a neighbor to Dusya. We were very close, we lived in the same apartment building when we were growing up in Leningrad. We used to run with the boys in the streets, teasing and taunting them. She was the one who persuaded me to join the squadron with her, and now she was dead.
I looked again over at Irina, who too was crying. Major Bershanskaya was talking to the regiment. She had not noticed that Irina and I were crying, or at least made no sign that she did. Now my face glistened with tears in the pale light of the tent, but I had to listen to tonight's briefing.
"We have a chance to avenge our fallen ones tonight.‚"Ě She stated happily, ‚"There is a small army encampment near Novorossijsk which will be filled with German soldiers. There will be many officers there with their underlings. They will not expect an attack after the show they put up last night, da? Most of their troops will have already gone to sleep. Remember to keep your altitude at six-hundred meters. We don't want any mistakes like last night, do we Sasha?"
The major looked at one of our newer pilots, and my head turned too. Sasha looked down at the ground. She had flown in at three hundred meters and dropped her bombs. Her plane was almost completely engulfed in the flames, but miraculously, she and her navigator Tanya made it through alright. They were caught by groundfire afterward, however, and managed to put the plane down just after passing our front lines.
"Now, girls, the weather is not as clear as it was last night. It will be a bit hazy down by the port tonight, so don't go below our bombing altitude. Also, the clouds are low tonight, so be careful. I recieved word from fighter command today that the skies should be clear of enemy activity tonight. Our Yak fighters have done their job today. Never the less, be careful, ladies. On your maps, the army camp will be in sector H13, alright? During the last recon flight over the area, it seems that the Germans have lit large fires. We think they are burning files that they have captured. But let them burn, da? For then we shall have light to see them by... Oh! And before I forget to tell you, stay out of map sectors K13, K12, H12, and I14 tonight. Our AAA units are on full alert and will fire at anything they see."
Everyone in the room weakly smiled. While we all were ready for our combat duty, every night was a chance we could die. We would take it to heart. The briefing was dismissed, and I went up to the table at the front of the tent to see who my navigator was for the night, because I had been daydreaming during that part of the briefing. I ran my finger down the list to find my name, and looked to the right. It was there in Major Bershanskaya's handwriting. I was flying with Irina tonight. I walked over to her. She was still crying. It was more from shock now than any other reason. I had no way to express my sorrow for Irina. So, as best I could with my bulky mens flight suit on, I hugged her. We cried on each other's shoulders', and waited for our opportunity to take our revenge that night...The Major strolled up behind us. She pried the two of us apart. Irina‚'s uniform, which she had altered to fit her like most women‚'s clothing, was still covered in Dusya‚'s blood from last night. There had been no time to wash anything today. "Irina," Major Bershanskaya walked over to her and knelt down next to her. "You were very brave last night." She walked out of the tent and let us be. We stayed close, my eyes had stopped tearing and Irina laid her head on my shoulder. The hat she had made from the excess fabric of her old uniform fell from her head onto the floor.
‚"We will have our revenge yet‚...‚"Ě Irina said. She grabbed her hat, and we walked out of the tent, heading toward our plane.



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Sample Briefing #2: June 3rd. Small Farm- 27 kilometers North of Novorossijsk:

This is the last day we will spend at this farm. Tonight we fly to a new location closer to the front lines. I will never forget this location, though. The airdrome is on the remains of an old farm. We were lucky to have a smooth dirt road to use as a runway, but still, this is one of the better places we have stayed at in quite a few months. There are few animals or crops, and the farmhouse itself is falling apart from years without repair. However, the place has its charm. There is an old riding paddock not too far from the road, and we are far enough behind our lines that one can walk for many kilometers when they have time off.
Another great thing about the farm is the family that inhabits it. They are a small elderly couple. They have much in the ways of help. The husband, who‚'s name is D‚'mitri, has been an excellent hand around the airdrome. While he may be in his late seventies, he still can easily handle an axe and chop for a whole day! One night, when Major Bershanskaya approved, we had a giant bonfire and danced. The wife is a great woman. She is also Tamara, like me, and is in her late seventies as well. but she is a great cook! She is always around to talk to, and seems to have a smile on her face most of the day, even with all the tragedy that has happened to her over the years. She lost her brothers during the civil war, and her parents during the Great War in 1917. We affectionately call the elderly couple our ‚"parents‚"Ě and to them, we are their ‚"daughters.‚"Ě Last night, at suppertime before our mission, they took us into their old farmhouse and fed us dinner. It was like a party. I had no idea ‚"mother‚"Ě had so much strength, to cook for two hundred of her hungry ‚"daughters.‚"Ě
They also have a sadder side to their story. They share their farmhouse with their grandchild. Their son was married to a beautiful woman, they tell us. They lived in Leningrad, where I was from. Their son had gone off to the war, and within three days of his going to the front, he was slaughtered along with his whole division by German tanks. They were very brave. His young boy was sent out here in the Kuban region after his mother died during the German bombings of Leningrad. Now he lives with his grandparents. I have taken a particular liking to the boy, Vasily. He is barely eleven years old, but he runs around the farm with his arms outstretched, as if he was trying to fly, like us. He has come to know us women well. During the mornings, most of us do not get the sleep that is allowed for us, so we sit and tell him stories. He listens well. A few weeks back, Raisa‚'s mother sent her up a plush toy bear. Raisa had no way she could possibly use it, so she kept it insider her plane when she flew. When we came to the farm, Raisa gave the bear to Vasily. He carries it around all day now. He named the bear Nadia, because that was his mother‚'s name. Looking around at this farm, this aerodrome, it brings strength to my heart. People I never would have normally known now look at me as their own daughter, sister, or even mother. Such a strong bond cannot be broken by the torrents of war, and we will not let the Germans try to stop it. This strong belief in our people keeps us going into battle. It gives us even more reason to fight‚...

Boosher
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"So do all who live to see such times, but that is not for them to decide. All you have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to you..."
-Gandalf

zjulik
08-03-2004, 06:36 PM
Either you will break your neck on this or it will be a true classichttp://ubbxforums.ubi.com/infopop/emoticons/icon_smile.gif

One comment - as much as I love immersional briefings, I tend to be more eager to fly then to read, so mostly, my limit for how long a briefing I actually end up reading goes by how much there is room for without having to scroll...

But that`s me.

PBNA-Boosher
08-03-2004, 06:43 PM
along with these there will also be a short list of bullet pointed objectives at the bottom of the list. This way, if you don't want to read the briefing and learn all the information I have provided for you... http://ubbxforums.ubi.com/images/smiley/52.gif

You can of course skip to the bottom, read your objectives, check your waypoints on the map, and start the mission.

Boosher
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"So do all who live to see such times, but that is not for them to decide. All you have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to you..."
-Gandalf

Udidtoo
08-03-2004, 07:18 PM
Boosher I have no idea what a patriotic Russian might or might not do but it was still a pretty darn good read.

I have always wished FB had a detailed after action debrief.

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I always have just enough fuel to arrive at the scene of my crash.

Texas LongHorn
08-03-2004, 07:46 PM
Wow Boosher, I'm impressed. The other poster was correct though IMHP. Two hundred missions like that and you could publish a book. I too am the same way in that if you have to scroll down it's too long, but that's just my opinion my friend. Don't get me wrong though, I actually like the historical style of the long briefings. Y'know what would be really cool is if we could read the briefings somehow without flying the campaign. It would be sorta' like a preview of what is to come. In that case the longer briefings would be great! Keep up the good work, I'll be looking forward to that campaign! All the best, LongHorn

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Waldo.Pepper
08-03-2004, 07:56 PM
I think that they are saying these wonderful briefings of yours are overmodelled http://ubbxforums.ubi.com/infopop/emoticons/icon_smile.gif

I think they're great... but I also think you will burn out if you plan on 200 or so of these.

BTW anyone know whene the PO2 will be flyable?

PBNA-Boosher
08-03-2004, 08:01 PM
Burning out is not an option. These in fact only took me 5-10 minutes to write, with a minute or two of editing. Some of the boys on Sukhoi.ru's forums are helping me Russian-ize them, and then they're ready to be implemented in the missions. The Po-2 should be flyable very soon after PF, I should think, with its gunner position. It will be an awesome campaign that is still in its planning stages now.

Boosher
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"So do all who live to see such times, but that is not for them to decide. All you have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to you..."
-Gandalf

Lt.Davis
08-03-2004, 08:02 PM
Very good reading those briefing, it's more real IMHO. I like that kind of briefing. Just a little suggesstion, make a simple note after the long briefing. It's for those who don't like to read.

"Biar berputih tulang, jangan berputih mata"
Translated:
"Let the whites of your bones, but do not show the whites of your eyes"

MadBadVlad
08-04-2004, 06:41 AM
A lot to read, but I actually appreciated the depth that the detail gave to the situation. I like realism and immersion so if it takes me just a few more seconds to read a storyline of this quality then I will make the effort. This sequence certainly fires you up for revenge and thats useful if you are in a PO-2 facing a dangerous night mission. Great stuff boosher !

CzechTexan
08-04-2004, 06:54 AM
Boosher, that is some pretty good writing. This could turn into an online book with an interesting way to be involved in the story as well (by flying IL2fb and living the story).

Your idea to use "bullets" for those who want to skip the story and go straight to the main points is a good one. And "Bullets" would be appropriate to use with this!


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Nanuk66
08-04-2004, 09:44 AM
I think it sounds very good and the briefings are quite long but nevertheless a good read, i know id read it all b4 the mission.

Good Job.

My only wish is that someone would do a very in depth campaign like this for a male squadron as, maybe just me, but i find it very hard to totally immerse myself in a pilot career if im a woman! (not being sexist or having a dig at the female pilots in the war or anything)

Ill still play the thing thou!

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English lesson 101:
The word is 'Lose' not 'Loose'. e.g.
That IL2 is gonna lose the fight against that 109.
That IL2's wing looks loose, its gonna fall off.
If i dive too vertically i will lose my wing. k thx.
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Yellonet
08-04-2004, 09:48 AM
Hey Boosher.. is it actually plausible that someone would destroy documents that they have captured? Just a small detail that I noticed..

Nicely written btw http://ubbxforums.ubi.com/infopop/emoticons/icon_smile.gif

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Capt._Tenneal
08-04-2004, 10:13 AM
Wow, Boosher, great read (the samples) so far ! I've always felt there is still a place in FB/AEP for scripted campaigns, and one of the main reasons is briefings like this that makes you feel like you are really fighting for (or against) something. Not just " Go to point A, escort bomber squadron xxx, and get home alive ".

PBNA-Boosher
08-04-2004, 12:29 PM
Thanks guys! I'm glad you liked it. Actually Yellonet, destroying files was one thing the Nazis did. I wanted to say book-burning, but I wasn't aware if this happened in major events outside Berlin.

Boosher
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"So do all who live to see such times, but that is not for them to decide. All you have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to you..."
-Gandalf

Ak9779
08-04-2004, 03:31 PM
Very, very nice. One of the things I do miss in IL2 is the human aspect of all these events, which seems to be lacking in the current missions, and completely nonexistent in the generated campaigns.

Excellent writing, but I agree with the others that it's a bit much, lengthwise. You will certainly have a book when you are done with this! The addition of the bullets at the bottom is an excellent way around reader fatigue, though.

If I had any suggestions, it would be to keep all the detail, but spread it across the missions more evenly. So on one night you talk about one thing (say the ill-fitting flight uniforms) and the next you mention something else (Say the story about Sasha coming in too low with the bombs) Which will both shorten the length of each mission breifing, and call into sharper detail each event. (though I understand that for an initial berifing you're going to want a lot of supporting details to build the atmosphere quickly)

The one other thing that causes just a tingle of worry, is you have to avoid making future references to people who might be killed in the current mission. I.e. if Irina happens to buy it on the current mission, and the next night she has some dialog, it might seem a little strange. (Though I admit I'm being a stickler here)

But anyway, this seems like it's going to be an amazing project, and I'm really looking forward to it's release. I'm also very impressed with your writing. I thing you're going to make this thing really shine.

Later,
Ak

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MACHINE GUN : JAMMED
FUEL TANK: LEAK
ENGINE: ON FIRE
PILOT: WOUNDED
...Yeah, it's gonna be one of those days...

PBNA-Boosher
08-04-2004, 04:08 PM
Thanks for the tips, I'll take those details to heart!

Boosher
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"So do all who live to see such times, but that is not for them to decide. All you have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to you..."
-Gandalf