caitlin23
Hey everyone! I now this is off-topic, but I'm posting all my poems here! Plz review them! Thank you for your time!
Hey everyone! I now this is off-topic, but I'm posting all my poems here! Plz review them! Thank you for your time!
A Storm's Fury
Silent black clouds engulf the sky,
Their presense predicts a storm.
The rain comes slowly at first,
Gently tapping the earth with cold droplets.
The lightning leaps with deadly accuracy,
To hammer the trembling earth
Meanwhile the thunder makes a great growl
At the scene of chaos below.
The wind howls and tears at the earth,
Intent at destroying the landscape.
Ah, the sun is peeping over the clouds,
It rises and fills up the sky, the storm is over.
Nappy Time!
My baby brother is very cute,
His eyes are brown and deep,
He even manages to look sweet,
When he's fast asleep.
But, he has a problem,Even though he's happy,
It's a smelly problem,not one for your pappy,
It's usually done by the mum, any guesses? well.....
IT'S HIS SMELLY NAPPY!
I don't like poems in general.
The second one is really silly and cute, and it has a good rhytm and nice rhymes.
The first one, I like less though. It might be a matter of tastes, but I feel like there's nothing really binding it together, especially in the second part.
Good work nevertheless. Keep writing. (:
I really like the first one. Sounds mysterious and epic, and I'm pretty fond of poems like that.
The second one I don't like though, because I don't really like them sort of poems. Like Limely said, it's all a matter of taste.
The first one is really good, very interesting and mysterious just like what Raydragon said. The other one, well it is ok.
I really love poems, they are an artistic way to express your feelings.
Thank's for the replies folks. Here's anouther one!
Easter time!
It's Easter time!
It's a wonderful Spring!
The new life and warm weather,
Make you want to sing!
Lambs leap in the fields,
Baby birds chirp in the trees.
The forests are full of flowers,
And the air's filled with the buzzing of bees.
Tnx for rating them.
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