Well, I've never writen a review before. I don't really know how.

I'll make it easier for you. one paragraph maybe on what you thought, nothign like a full fledged movie review like what Lynx does, maybe something just a bit longer that this post that's it. What I'm looking for is somethig like you see in books, y'know those brief comments that some random newspaper says about the book? It doesn't have to be anything too long

OK, here goes nothing.

Sev's BGE2 Story is an action packed adventure filled with danger, explosions, suspence, romance, trechary, and fun. Based on one of the best rated games in the nation Beyond Good and Evil this story has it all. Join the fearless reporter Jade, the straight forward Pey'j, the gental giant Double H and the Mysterious Sev, as they find the truth behind the kiddnappings going on in their world of Hillys. You won't be disapointed.

I rate this story 4 stars out of five.

Thankyou. It's on my site, now to wait for the rest of them. Good work!!

You're welcome, and thank you.

Well, now that I'm back from holiday, and after a long time of reading through the updates, I'll be checking your story regularly again. A lot has happened in your story since the last time I read it. I must say that your doing a good job on making in suspenseful, it's really a great story. I like the Sev character more and more as the story progresses, this character probably has your heart and soul put into it. I'm just glad I'm able to read this story again. good luck with the next update!

Thanks denden. If you could, put a review of the story up for me. Have a look at Thiendrah's for a guideline.

I'll do that as soon as possible.

Here we go again, I know its not much but I've been focusing most of my time on WolfNet, sorry! I'll make a big update soon, promise! Still waiting for those reviews people.

...Avarice looked over the vital signs monitors on the Zero-Tau pod, muttering to himself and making notes in his nanite brain implants, Sev knew the doctor never even looked at any problem without giving it a thorough overview to start with, it was part of what made him such a brilliant surgeon, which in turn gave him an infuriating better-than-thou attitude. After a good minute of muttering the doctor spoke up ‘This is a very serious case, He is completely missing two ribs, his lung is punctured and would have collapsed had you not put the nanotech health patch on, his stomach wall is gone and there are sever lacerations in his intestine, to top it all off there are severe hemorrhages in his lung and stomach. Frankly I’m surprised he has survived this long. What hit him?” Avarice asked as if it was of no consequence.

“The same thing I’ll use on your legs if he dies, a frag gun” Sev answered coldly.

“Oh…well, I’ll um” Avarice let out a sigh “If I take him out of Zero-Tau the shock will kill him, and if it doesn’t the hemorrhages will. I’ll have to operate on him while he’s in Zero-Tau.”

“Frag!” Jade started earning the stares of Sev and Avarice, she didn’t seem like the type to use language like that.

“Lets go Jade, leave Avarice to do his work.” Sev said, steering Jade out onto the streets of Hellport, she was immediately assaulted by the variety of smells, fuel from passing vehicles, the waste and rubbish flowing onto the streets and a million other noxious elements that made up…

“The smells of home’ Sev said, taking a huge breath and savouring the contaminated air of his home of five years. It felt good to be back on the filthy, rusted and dangerous streets of Hellport and Sev took a moment to refresh his memory of the place. Hellport had first been established way back when in the 23rd Century when the Commonwealth was funding colonization of the Borderworlds, back then Hellport was known as DSCR (Deep Space Colonist Relay) 11345529 but due to the rich asteroids that shared orbit around Terbus the criminal element soon took over and Hellport was born. Hellport itself was a huge, vaguely ring-shaped space station that formed a complete ring around the green and white planet it orbited, a tiny Fahrenheit-class planet known as Terbus, as well as the ring around the planet that made up most of Hellport there were innumerable small stations among the ring of asteroids that also orbited Terbus. These asteroids were the why and how of the criminal overlords taking over Hellport, they contained many millions of tons of pure Trlyiium, a key ingredient in forging durasteel. The barons started by taking over the mining and processing stations among the asteroids. With a virtual stranglehold on Hellport’s only income the barons were able to take over. Since then the baron’s descendants had been in total control of Hellport.

Charming.

Ah yes, Hellport. I'm sure you'd love to live there. Several thousand kilometers of prize land, built by extortion and blood, and as rusty as you please.

Somewhat off topic but here's a challenge for anyone who reads my rantings: Below is an chunk from a song. Try and guess who wrote it.

We are the Overflow from Your Ordered Society

We are the ones you don’t want to hear about
We are the ones you blame
For all your troubles and fears
We are the ones you blame
Cause we are the overflow from your ordered society

We are the ones you shun
We are the ones you fear
We are the ones you hate
We are the ones you talk about
When say “This world’s gone to hell”

You think we’re to blame
When anything goes wrong
When anything is wrong
We are the ones you blame
Cause we are the overflow from your ordered society

We are the ones you shun
We are the ones you fear
We are the ones you hate
We are the ones you talk about
When say “This world’s gone to hell”

What you want is what you get
What we need is what you take
You fear us and you screen us
And you think we’re gunna take that lyin down!
Cause we are the overflow from your ordered society

We are the ones you shun
We are the ones you fear
We are the ones you hate
We are the ones you talk about
When say “This world’s gone to hell”

Uh, Big Als Children Singalong?

ha! No, I wrote that song, mind you it's not quite finished yet but I plan to include it in the story later on somehow.

Godsmack rule.

Here's my review, there could be some spelling or grammatical errors, but I did my best.

This story following the events of the incredible Beyond Good & Evil videogame is simply astounishing. Fans of the game will enjoy this wonderful, action-packed tale of Jade, Pey'j, Double H and in particular the intriguing new character Sev, as they try to get rid of their unwanted invaders for good. This story has everything you'd expect from a sequel to our beloved game, and more. The BGE-universe gets explored and expanded, but thankfully you will always feel that it's still in the same old, trusty world you got to know and love. BGE-fans, trust me when I say that you will have a great time reading this story.

I rate this story 8 out of 10

Thanks Denden, for the second time this is exactly the sort of thing I wanted.

"And I walked this line
A million and one f*cking times
but not this time"-Green day, Jesus of Suburbia

Godsmack rule.

I give you an 11/10, because even though I didnt really read much, I know you gave 110% effort! Keep giving it your all!

its that time of the week again. just got Ground Control 2 and it rules. "Victory or Death! For the Northern Star Alliance I would gladly give my life!"

Hellport’s interior was an odd conglomeration of rusted metal, glass and shining durasteel, down on street level where Sev and Jade were standing everything was built out of original parts from the old sleeper ships and Colony Cruisers that originally came to the Borderworlds, as such the street level was a mess of old rusted bits and pieces welded together to form a barely airtight, vaguely street shaped U of rust. About five kilometers up was the clear, transparisteel roof of Hellport, blackened from years of asteroid and weapon impacts and starship engines. Above street level was a the durasteel walls of the cleaner upper decks where any business that held any degree of self respect or legality was based around the shipyards and massive docks and hangers in the upper decks.

“Lets eat” Sev suggested, trying to take Jade’s mind off Hub, there was nothing she could do for him now. It was all in Avarice’s hands. After warning Jade to stay close to him again Sev steered her over to one of his old haunts, a spacer’s bar which had been here since Hellport was first built: The Crashed Cruiser, a title which was rather appropriate seeing as the bar was made out of a decommissioned Colony Cruiser bridge. Sev stepped in waving greetings to old friends and taking a moment to restore his memory of the place. A semi-circular room with a couple dozen tables and a long bar in front of a twelve meter holoscreen, the whole place was lit by dim blue lights and some soft melodic music was playing through hidden speakers. Sev walked over to the bar and sat down on the stool, the bar, like everything else in the Crashed Cruiser seemed to be made of a blue metal due to the lighting and the fact that it actually was made of blue metal. “Usual Kresta” Sev said without looking at the barmaid.

“And that would be?” A young female voice asked, Sev looked up, a young girl no more than sixteen was standing behind the bar, and she had blonde hair that brushed her shoulders in a way that was vaguely familiar. It was exactly the way Sev’s own hair fell but the girl also had a long, thin braid and large brown eyes. The whole combination was annoying familiar to Sev but she hadn’t been here when Sev had made Hellport his home. “Well?” The girl asked, irritated now.

“Seraph Downs, that’s the usual” Sev replied.

“Everything’s the usual’ the girl replied in what Sev only just realized was a English accent almost identical to his. ‘Ally!’ the name burst into his head, his little sister was alive and standing right here in front of him! “Allyshia”

Allyshia Caravera looked up at the scruffy mercenary; it was a long time since she’d heard that name. There was only one person it could possibly be. “S…Sev, is it you?’ she asked shakily.

Sev just smiled, “Who else could it be”.

Ally leapt over the bar and threw her arms around her brother Sev returned the embrace. As far as either could recall it had been five years since they had seen the other alive.

“Let me get a look at you” Sev said, holding Ally at arm’s length. “You’ve grown, how old are you now?”

“Sixteen, and look at you Sev, I think you’ve got bigger to and I don’t remember that haircut” Ally laughed.

“Sev?” Jade broke in.

“Jade, allow me to introduce you to me little sister Ally. Ally this is Jade my contract” Sev performed introductions. Now that Jade was satisfied as to this new girl’s identity she reached out and shook Ally’s hand. ‘Why would you be jealous of her anyway, she’s sixteen? I must be getting paranoid’.

“What brings you to my humble home?” Ally asked “Surely not the drinks”

“Actually we came to see Avarice” Sev explained the story so far in brief: his contract, Jade, the revolution and Hub’s surgery. “And that about covers it” Sev finished; he shuddered to think what Hub was undergoing at Avarice’s hands.

“The Alpha Sections helped destroy Furia and our entire race, I’m coming with you” Ally looked up at Sev with a look that said ‘I’m not taking no for an answer’.

Sev knew better than to ague with his sister, she could be extremely stubborn at times. “Alright, I’m going to check on Avarice, hopefully he’s done something I can impale him for.” Sev growled. “Jade, you fill Ally in on what’s happening.” Sev’s only reason for giving Jade the task of bringing Ally up to date was that it was probably a good idea to keep Jade away from Avarice’s Hideout until Hub’s Zero-Tau surgery was over. It would be good for her if he did what he could to take her mind of it.

“Why I am playing teacher to your sister Sev” Jade said with a bit more venom than usual.

“Because it would be better if you don’t see Hub being operated on in Zero-Tau” he leaned closer to Jade and said quietly “Look, I just don’t want to put you through seeing someone get cut open in Zero-Tau, its not pretty.”

Jade put up the defiance act for a moment longer, it wasn’t that she was squeamish, it would take someone with an extremely strong stomach or emotion blocking implants to watch a Zero-Tau operation let alone perform one. “Alright” Jade said, trying to make it sound grudging. Sev patted her gently on the shoulder before disappearing.

As Sev walked of he was sure he heard Ally trying to get to know Jade. “Hey look at that hair colour, are you sure its natural…”

HELLPORT-Samson’s Home

Sev didn’t go back to Avarice straight away, first he made a sop at the home of an old friend: Samson. Samson’s home was a small, tubular affair about twelve meters long by three wide. It was a gutted McDonnell Douglas C/A-13 Combat Cruiser main thruster tube and so Samson’s home was the butt of many good-natured ‘my home is a starship engine’ jokes made by both his many friends and Samson himself.

Who is Samson??? Find out next update, I wanted this to be longer ah well.

TRIVIA:Sev's OICW is actually a real gun. But he's traded it in for a Morita.

You do relize that if you keep letting him defy and argue with women he's going to find himself in a world of hurt, right?

Yes I do Thiendrah especially if its Jade, but Sev has spent five years answering to no-one, you can't expect him to change instantly.

TRIVIA: This was originally oing to be a rossover with me in it rahter than Sev. Shutup! Stop laughing at me.