Hi everybody! I've seen that many of you have written fanfictions and I thought I1d try one myself.I'll be posting the proloque in a few hours and then tell me If I should continue it.

Soory people,I haven't been able to post the proloque yet,but I'll do it in a few days(Reason:My mother)

No sweat, we've got all the time in the world. This forum ain't going anywhere(I hope).

Thanks
In Hungary its half past nine in the morning,I may be able to post the proloque at about Hungarian time 15:00 ((I hope ))

CORRECTION:I'm putting up the proloque right now!.
I wanted the proloque to be an easy start introducing some of the main characters.(Note that the proloque plays 30 years BEFORE BGE)
Here it goes:
System 6
Planet Aethia
Nadreg City


A labyrinth. That’s what you think first when you see the city of Nadreg. Few people can walk through the City without getting lost, but to others it was an open book. To Darrel it was home, a place where he lived almost his entire life, a place that was safe. Until now….
Darrel was running as hard as he could trying to lose his chasers, but unfortunately they knew their way around. Those boys have made his life a living hell for the past few weeks. Even now he was trying not to notice the pain in his arm, although it has probably been broken by them. But he knew that if he would stop to examine his arm, they would catch him and he would end up worse. So he continued without stopping, always looking back to see if he’s safe. That caused him to run into someone knocking Darrel to the ground.
-Sorry I wasn’t looking and I…..-he said while he looked up, to see who he crashed into.
It was a boy, a Sus Sapiens, about ten years older than Darrel, smiling down on him, and helping him up.
-No problem kid, I hardly felt it, ha-ha-ha!- he replied –No har….. Wait a second, what’s with your arm?
-Umm… Nothing, it doesn’t matter.-he said, covering his arm with his torn shirt.-Please I must hurry, I can’t stop or…..-
-Slow down, what are you running from?-
-He was running from me!-said a someone from the shadows.
-Why?-
Suddenly group of kids appeared, all of them looked about 5 years older than Darrel. Their leader stepped out:
-He couldn’t pay us the protection tax, so we must punish him for that.-
-Are you mad?! You probably broken his arm what else do you want from him?-
-Make him beg!-the kid replied with a grin
-If you think I’m gonna let you h….. Wait a second, I know you! You’re that kid searched by the police!
-Kheck….-said Darrel quietly
-I’m that one alright! Now step aside or I’ll make bacon out of you!-
-Come and get me!-
The boys formed a circle around Darrel, the pig, and their leader.
Kheck roared and started running against the pig. The pig shouted ,,Chili Con Carne” and did the same.
They crashed into each other. To the pig, it was nothing more than when Darrel crashed into him, but for Kheck, it was like running against a brick wall with his head. He fell to the ground not being able to move. The other ones quickly took him and ran away. Darrel was amazed.
-Ha-ha! It seems my Aunt Geneva’s cooking was harder than his head- laughed the pig.
-Thank you, I don’t know what to say, I…..-
-Don’t mention it kid, glad to be of help. But you should really go home now.-
-This IS my home-
-Wha’? You live on the streets?! But you have to go somewhere safe, your arm is probably broken.-
-I don’t have anywhere to go.-
-Hmm… Then come with me to my Aunt! I’m sure that she will let you stay, when she hears what happened to you!-
-Thanks, nobody ever helped me this much…-
-Nothing to it kid. By the way what’s your name?-
-Darrel-
-I’m Pey’j. Now come on lets hurry, or my Aunt will make dinner out of me!

Sorry for any problems but this is my first story, not to mention in English. I welcome critics, or adviceson my story.(Or any other reply)

I'll be posting Chapter 1 in a few days but I have little time to write since I got Dreamfall
Have fun

Well, you did a pretty nice job on the writing part. It's not very advanced english but it's sufficient for writing a nice understandable story. As for the prologue itself, I like how you link Pey'j and Kheck together in the past. It's something new and surely it's going to be interesting further on in the story. Nice start, I'm curious to how your story will progress.

Hi everyone!
Thank's for waiting!
I'm posting Chapter 1 right now and in a few hours I'll post Chapter 2.
These will be the version 1.0
I'm working on 2.0 with (hopefully) upgraded English.
Your ancestors sure choosed a hard language.
Now here it goes...

System 6
Planet Aethia
Year: 2415
50 Miles South of Karnek City
10 Years Later

The wastelands. A barren and lifeless place in the outskirts of Karnek City. Thousands of years ago, many wars ravaged across here turning it into an unliveable desert. Those wars ended many centuries ago, but instead a new fight started for the freedom of the whole planet.
-Daedalos, do you read me? I’ve got DomZ ships closing in at three o’clock!-
-Copy that Loudmouth. I’m on my way. By the way, have you seen Wild Boar?-
-Nope. But I hope he’ll arrive soon or everything that’s going to be left of us are a pile of dust and scrap metal-
Loudmouth watched the monitor to see if he lost his attackers, but luck has left him this time. He turned his Blackwing to shoot back at them. His enemies were DomZ Scourges. Scourges are small, versatile fighters, equipped with lethal laser cannons.
-Daedalos where the hell are you already. I could really… really…REALLY use some backup right about now!-
Loudmouth turned his eyes away from the communications console, and activated the weapons system. He pointed the two particle beam cannons at the first Scourge
-Now you’re gonna’ get it!- he shouted and opened fire.
The Scourge fired back, but not soon enough.
-Yeah! One down and…. Hey what’s happening?!
One of the DomZ delivered a powerful laser blow to his ship. The emergency signals activated .
-Daedalos, I got hit! Come here quick or I’m done for!
-Hold on, I’m coming!- said Daedalos through the comms system
Daedalos flew with top speed to help him, but he already knew he wouldn’t arrive in time when suddenly…
-Chili Con Carne!- shouted someone.
Another Blackwing appeared above the Scourges. Two SRS rockets were fired by its captain destroying most of the Scourges, while he shot down the remaining ones with the twin P.B. cannons.
-What took you so long Wild Boar?- said Loudmouth to the newly arrived. –I was worried that you turned into roast.-
-Shut up or I’m gonna’ regret saving you- he replied.
-Both of you shut up- commanded Daedalos. –You can kill each other later, but let’s get home first. This was enough for today.-
The trio flew into the sunset and all they have left behind was their sign of victory

This would be it.Sorry, I know its a bit short.
I know its not too good, but I think I'll improve in time.
Any guesses who Darrel(Daedalos) is?
If you can't guess it don't worry: in Chapter 2 and 3 it'll be revealed.((By the way, its not too hard, just look at the date.(the Proloque takes place in 2405 based on the intro in beyondgoodevil.com/us I hope its correct ))
Its 10 PM in Hungary so I think I'll go to sleep now. I didn't wanted to go before I post Chapter 1. I'll post Chapter 2 at about Hungarian time: 8 AM.
Sorry, I talk a little too much
Good Night!

Well come on! Please continue!